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Peer Review #2

George I really enjoyed your description of the Sydney streets, especially considering it is something that I’ve witnessed in person. Your use of detailed description is very reminiscent of Charles Dickens himself, your elongated final sentence is particularly evocative with the piling of comma after comma. Your word choice is very effective in creating that urban impression with ‘polyethylene’, ‘cement’, ‘synthetic’, ‘harsh artifice’. If you were to expand on this work as a larger piece of writing, I would think it would be good to correlate the white lights of the screens with the red, yellow and green of the traffic, there could be some strong symbolic links to make there. The downtrodden homeless of today could also feature, perhaps with some elements of Dickens and the circus.


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